Internals

"Internals" is what my group calls the thinking in your head stuff. Reacting to events, reviewing options, changing WHY you do things. I took Chapter 2 of Heart Journey to Critique which was 12 ms. pages long, most of them internals. I knew it was too long but was struggling with the set up of the character, Del, and the book. So it was something I needed to know, but could thread in for the reader later.

I'm must remember that Del is a very direct woman, not one who does self-examination very often or for very long.

In any event, I cleaned up the chapter to make it stronger as advised by the group (I was keeping Heart Fate in mind and they weren't). So now Chapter 2 is 6 pages and I'll be moving the scenes that were going into 3 into 2...

Internals: make them as brief and pithy as possible. If you can show a person's emotional struggle when they are talking with someone else or acting, that's even better.

May you forget about self-examination today and go with the flow, whatever that might be.
Robin